This assignment was done for module #11 for the discussion Diverse and Inclusive Editing Practices. 

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We were tasked with reviewing a past technical paper we wrote and identifying features and phrases that could cause confusion with regards to preparing for translation. The assignment focused on diverse and inclusive editing practices for global and historically marginalized and/or minority audiences.

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Additionally, we were to reference the Council of Editors of Learned Journals (CELJ) and re-analyze the same technical paper using one of the inclusive editing style guides. 

The style guide can be found at this link: https://www.glaad.org/reference

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I chose to analyze an introductory memo that I wrote for a previous class . It was during the first week of class, so the teacher wanted to learn more about us and our knowledge. I only examined the first half of the memo for the sake of length. The memo with my revisions and comments is attached below, and I have also included a list of changes that is more detailed. I could have done more revising when it comes to diction and some other micro elements, but I just stuck to the really main features that I believe would have caused confusion. 

 

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List of Changes:

• There were many abbreviations and acronyms (Dr., RE, BA, UCF) that should be removed, or should have the spelled out word included with the acronym. 

• The date format should be customary to the targeted culture, and also any numerical references should be removed (ENC5237 for the course number should be replaced with the course title).

• Geographic references (Melbourne, FL) need to be more clearly defined. It should be changed to Melbourne, Florida, USA, or something similar.

• Software references (Microsoft Word) should be removed or further explained (like what the software does). 

• Many instances of diction can be revised to avoid ambiguity and maintain consistency throughout the document. 

 

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CELJ Style Guide:

I chose to look at the GLAAD Media Reference Guide. They provided a very comprehensive and easy-to-follow PDF version on their website. The introduction is bolded and states "'Fair, Accurate, & Inclusive'", followed by sections including the glossary, important topics, and community resources. This reference guide mostly involves information on sexual orientation and pronoun use. There are many proper terms to use, along with terms that may be deemed offensive and therefore avoidable. An important section is that on religion and faith. This media reference does not bash any type of religion or faith, but rather attempts to demonstrate the myth that religious people universally oppose LGBTQ+ individuals. Another section discusses hate crimes and provides jarring statistics. Although some of these topics may be controversial and/or difficult to read, it is reality. I think this reference guide can go beyond just helping authors and editors, as it can be read and comprehended in order to gain more understanding and empathy for those around us. 

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